flash

The promise of tomorrow,
the sleeping power with its
casual and distant politeness
penetrates the distance between
me and the galaxies, soothing my
sun-chapped skin, a subtle shift of air,
a heavenly haze into which the starry
flowers of my wallpaper fade.

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Above 42 words inspired by Yeah Write #177

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33 thoughts on “flash

  1. “casual and distant politeness” was my favorite line. It was a dreamy chunk you carved out, but the last word ‘melt’ may be more suited if you changed it to ‘fade’. This is my casual and distant polite suggestion given only because this was good:)

  2. Really nice rhythm, and I love the soothing space imagery, especially “distance between/me and the galaxies,” and “heavenly haze into which the starry/flowers.”

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